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Dynamic Cover Letters
Job-Search Cover Letter Tutorial

 

Page 9 of the Cover Letter Tutorial: Examples of Bad Openers

 

Examples of Bad First Paragraphs in Actual Job-Search Cover Letters:

 

In these examples, the recipient can gather only by reading between the lines that the writer is applying for a job. Consider how much better these openers would be if the writers were much more explicit about why they're writing and what position they seek:

 

Dear Mrs. Cory:
While I was visiting Oregon last year, the name of your station came up repeatedly in discussion as having a compelling newscast. Given my interest in broadcasting as a career, I have taken the liberty of enclosing my resume.

 

Dear Mr. Duff:
There are no substitutes for Drive, Motivation, and Desire. In December, I will graduate from Boston University with a degree in investment finance. Along with my open receptive mind and the above-mentioned characteristics, I offer you a unique opportunity of propelling your already successful organization in the investments field.

 

Dear Mr. Bradford:
My experience working as an attractions host at the Disney-MGM Studios will enable me to understand the philosophies and daily activities at the Walt Disney World resort. I was a part of the opening crew of the Twilight Zone Tower of Terror and Sunset Boulevard. Because it was a new attraction, we had to make important decisions on our own as to how to best operate the attraction. I have demonstrated that I can work well with others by my experience in the Walt Disney College Program.

 

Read on to learn more about the second paragraph of a dynamic cover letter...

 

 

 

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