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I have been referred to you by Samantha Willamette, whom you interviewed last month for a tour-guide position. She informed me that Languages Unlimited is currently searching for someone in the translation department. I am fluent in Spanish and Russian. I feel that my bilingual and international experiences will benefit your company. I am currently a junior at Ball State University, where I am working on a degree in corporate finance and a minor in Spanish. My university schedule permits me to work flexible hours in a part-time position. I would really enjoy meeting with you at your convenience and will contact your office within the next week. In case you don't feel like imagining how much more interesting the letter would be when fewer sentences start with "I," here's a way to fix it:
Samantha Willamette, whom you interviewed last month for a tour-guide position, informed me that Languages Unlimited is currently searching for someone in the translation department, so I am writing to tell you how my bilingual skills and international experiences can benefit your company in a part-time position. Fluent in Spanish and Russian, I am currently a junior at Ball State University, where I am working on a degree in corporate finance and a minor in Spanish. I would really enjoy meeting with you at your convenience and will contact your office within the next week.
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