This paragraph is too long and contains too many ideas that are not
only unconnected to the job the writer seeks as a computer
programmer, but unconnected to each other. Note that he makes a
stab at telling how his degree in philosophy will help him as a
programmer, but he probably needs to do more to justify his
qualifications based on such an unrelated degree:
For nearly three years I have been a student computer technician for
Academic Computing Services at Bucknell University. I am responsible
for the repair and maintenance of all faculty, staff, and computer
lab machines on campus. My duties also include the maintenance of
our network and servers. Parallel with these responsibilities, I
am also a lab supervisor for Academic Computing Services. I am
also responsible for designing and maintaining several of Bucknell's
home pages for the World Wide Web, experience that has provided me
with a detailed knowledge of the HTML programming language. In
August 2003, I will complete my bachelor's degree in philosophy.
My liberal arts background has equipped me with exemplary
communication skills. I have taken several math and computer
science courses in my college career. My mathematics background
includes trigonometry, statistics, calculus I and II, linear
algebra, logic, and discrete math. I have also taken several
computer science courses. In these courses, I work with Assembly,
Pascal, C/C++, and several other languages.
I am currently programming using C/C++ in the
Windows NT and Windows XP environments.
