When I look at this picture of myself, I realize how much I’ ve grown and changed, not
only physically, but also mentally as a person in the last couple of years. Less than one
month after this photograph was taken, I arrived at the [school’ s name] in [school’ s location]
without any idea of what to expect. I entered my second year of high school as an innocent
thirteen year-old who was about a thousand miles from home and was a new member of
not the sophomore, but “ lower-middle” class. Around me in this picture are the things which
were most important in my life at the time: studying different types of cars and planes, following
Michael Jordan’ s latest move, and seeing the latest blockbuster show like “ Phantom of the
Opera” or “ Jurassic Park” . On my t-shirt is the rest of my life -- tennis. Midway through my senior
year at the special [school’ s name] school, the focuses in my life have changed dramatically.
If there is one common occurrence which takes place for every single person in the diverse
student body at [school’ s name], it is that we all grow up much faster for having lived there.
I do not know whether this speeding up of the maturing process is generally good or bad,
but I definitely have benefited.
The classroom has become a whole different realm for me. Before, the teachers and
students alike preached the importance of learning, but it was implicitly obvious that the
most important concern was grades. At [school’ s name] teachers genuinely believe that
learning is the most importance objective and deeply encourage us to collaborate with
each other and make use of all resources that we may find. In fact, in a certain class
this year, my teacher assigned us to prepare every day of the week to discuss a certain
book; there were only two require-ments in this preparation -- we had to maximize our
sources, gleaning from everything and everyone in the school, but we were not allowed
to actually look at the book. As a result, I know more about that book than any other
that I have actually read. It is teaching methods such as this which ensure that we
will learn more. Indeed, this matter of “ thinking” has been one of the most important
aspects of my experience. Whether in Physics or English, I’ m required to approach
every problem and idea independently and creatively rather than just regurgitate the
teacher’ s words. In discussion with fellow students both inside and outside of class,
the complex thoughts flowing through everyone’ s brain is evident.
However, I believe that the most important concepts that I have espoused in being
independent of my parents for half of each year, deal with being a cosmopolitan
person. The school’ s faculty and students are conscious about keeping all of the
kids’ attention from being based on the school. Every single issue of global concern
is brought forth by one group or another whether it be a faculty member, publication,
ethnic society, or individual student. Along with being aware of issues of importance,
after attending [school’ s name] my personality has evolved. First, my mannerisms
have grown: the school stresses giving respect to everyone and everything. Our
former headmaster often said, “ Character can be measured not by one’ s interaction
with people who are better off than him or herself, but by one’ s interactions with those
who are worse off.” The other prime goal of the school’ s community is to convert every
single timid lower-classman into a loud, rambunctious senior. Basically, if you have
an opinion about something, it is wrong not to voice that opinion. Of course, being
obnoxious is not the idea. The key is to become a master of communication with
teachers, fellow students, all of who are a part of the community, and most
importantly, those who are outside of the community.
I do not want to make [school’ s name] sound as if it produces the perfect
students, because it doesn’ t. But the school deserves a lot of credit for its
efforts. Often, some part of the mold does remain. As the college experience
approaches, I am still the same person, only modified to better maximize my
talents. Although I still have some time to play tennis and see movies, perhaps
one of the few similarities between this photograph and me now is my smile.
ADMISSIONS COMMITTEE COMMENTS:
This essay is fairly well written. The essayist makes boarding school his focus,
using it to explain and describe how and why he has changed over the years. A
lot of students write about what wonderful people they have become, but they fail to
do a good job of understanding and explaining the forces that prevailed to make them
change. This writer focuses on the strengths of the school itself. He demonstrates the
sort of values it tries to instill in its students such as, “Encouraging us to
collaborate with each other and make use of all resources that we may find,” and
“Giving respect to everyone and everything.” Because the writer does so, the reader
never doubts that the applicant possesses all the qualities that he credits to the school.
Using this method has two advantages. First, the positive, upbeat attitude he has
toward his institution is rare. Second, Stanford, for one, recognized that this would
reflect well on his ability to adapt to and be a positive force at their school.
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